Please tell me what you think of this poem??

Rose and Weed



A bright amber sun hovered in the sky

showering the garden with light

The air was crisp and clear

but warm

very warm

Grass was dancing to the breeze

as it whistled softly

The smell of the flowers resided in the air

misty

damp



My gaze instantly landed on an array of roses

their petals sprouting outward like cabbage

velvety and ruby-colored

so beautiful

calling out for everyone to notice them

They stood out from the other flowers

like diamonds among rocks

I plucked one from the soil

The dirt hanging off the stem

seemed out of place

on this masterpiece nature had perfected

I reached out to shake it off

and a needle-like thorn pricked me



I had little time to brush away the blood

Something

Someone, rather,

bumped into my side

She was a little girl

Her face was beaming

and her eyes sparkled with pride



In her hand she clutched a weed

horrid and disfigured

dead

withered

shriveled up like dry fruit

and dull

Yet, the way this girl held it,

she could have been showing me gold



A smile plastered across her cheeks,

she held out the weed-

as if offering it to me

The hopeful look in her eyes told me to take it

Yet her hand was pointed away from me



"For you," she said, confirming my guess

Yet her eyes were still looking in another direction

blankly

as if staring off into space

I didn't understand at first

and then it all made sense



She was blind



I glanced down at my rose

vibrant and eye-catching

proof of nature's artistic talents

yet hurtful with its thorns

as if protecting the rose from the unworthy



and then



I looked back at the weed

its rusty, browning color

its drained, gloomy appearance

a disfigured mistake nature must have made



If we were all blind

we might be able to see

which one was more beautiful.

Please tell me what you think of this poem??
i liked it. Did u write that urself? It was my kind of style.

I'm a poet my self and i usually write in that style.

Great job,keep it up. I enjoy reading poetry.=)
Reply:that was truly touching. i love your style, and the topic is beautiful. one tiny thing- outward "like a cabbage" is slightly odd, but other than that edit, i havent read anm amateur poem that good in ages. i want to read it over and over again...
Reply:very good