Does my essay meet the prompt requirements in a good way?...enough for an A?

the prompt was



Describe how Lessing's imagery connects with Jerry's quest.



When one is young and yearning for adventure, it is apparent that they look up to the older crowd for inspiration on adding excitement to their lives. In this case, Lessing gives the impression that Jerry is motivated by the older boys swimming and having a fun time going through the tunnel together, along with the appearance of the more dangerous side of the beach. Jerry decides that he wants to accomplish the same feat and sets his mind to doing so. When he gloriously does, his success lets readers see the transition he has gone through from being a sheltered child to being more independent. His endeavor of independence is described through Lessing’s contrasts of imagery between the features of the safe position Jerry is used to and those of the unknown, dangerous one, these of which show the transition taking place through the quest, as well as symbolizing the obstacles and challenges Jerry has to face.

Jerry begins his mission by training himself to be able to breathe underwater for long periods of time. Challenges that further accentuate his heroic quest can be thought of as the trials he had when he was in training. His previous fears of some frightening aspects of the underwater world test his strengths of being able to withstand the uncertainties he has of going through the tunnel. When Lessing’s uses of imagery describe his experience of the moment that, “something soft and clammy touched his mouth; he saw a dark frond moving against the grayish rock, and panic filled him. He thought of octopuses of clinging weed.” (405) readers see that he isn’t any more comforted. This picture sets a scene of feeling and seeing unpleasant things. Lessing created this through vivid imagery that portrays how Jerry was getting a small taste of what was to come ahead on his journey.

Another aspect of the story that shows how Jerry ventured off into an underworld of danger are the pains he had when actually going through the tunnel. “His lungs were beginning to hurt…the water was a clear jewel-green all around him. Then he saw above his head a crack running up through the rock…He was at the end of what he could do. He looked up at the crack as if it were filled with air and not water, as if he could put his mouth to it and draw in air.” (406-407) The imagery used to portray his struggling shows how difficult of a challenge it was to endure, and thus leading to how heroic he is for such an endeavor. Contrasts of imagery can be seen through the fact that “it was like a water dance…the water sparkled as if sequins were dropping through it…he could feel the innumerable tiny touches of them. It was like swimming in flaked sliver.” (404) This along with the dissimilarity of “[drifting] to the surface, his face turned up to the air. He was gasping like a fish. He felt he would sink now and drown …he could see nothing but red-veined, clotted dark. His eyes must have burst, he thought…” (407) show Jerry’s pain in his new position of going through more dangerous, frightening things in contrast to the beauty of the water and his innocence.

Jerry’s great efforts of persisting on with his quest result in a highly deserved accomplishment. His independence is shown through descriptions of going through the tunnel. However through Lessing’s imagery, going through the tunnel is not only portrayed as a physical quest, but more of a symbolic passageway into freedom and independence. With Lessing’s imagery connecting to Jerry’s quest in such a way that readers practically see the colorful journey through bodily senses enough to realize the intensity and struggling he went through when on his adventure. His rewarded ending is shown, along with all the imagery used, how heroic of a person he is for enduring all the difficulties throughout his expedition.

Does my essay meet the prompt requirements in a good way?...enough for an A?
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I would rephrase this : His endeavor of independence is described through Lessing’s contrasts of imagery between the features of the safe position Jerry is used to and those of the unknown, dangerous one, these of which show the transition taking place through the quest, as well as symbolizing the obstacles and challenges Jerry has to face.



Jerry's endeavor of independence is described through Lessing's contrasts of imagery between Jerry's comfort zone and the unknown. Lessing shows these transitions taking place through the quest in addition symbolizing the obstacles and challenges Jerry has to face.



I think your essay is great. A few touches to fine tune it and it is definitely worth an A.
Reply:Yes. If not it is a B+. I could help you more if I could see the requirements. When is it due?

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